One of my earliest poems *From middle school* Comment and criticize please.


The real thing you can not see
What is truly wrong with me
I'm not okay when I seem so happy
If you haven't noticed my smiles crappy
I may be laughing but inside i'm crying
If you dont notice this
I dont blame you, who would?
Even though my best friend should.

thats really good!

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That is quite good for something you wrote in middle school!
I have my one of my first poems from middle school...somewhere...

Thank you! That means a bunch ^_^. BTW omg, i love paramore!

Thanks Zachy! You should share some of your poems with me! I love reading them ^_^.

Hey ! Thats a pretty good poem coming from middle school. I have MANY from middle school [ Duh, because im going to grade 9 >.<]. I love looking at them to see what i improved on and what i wrote that was very retarded. (: :P Most of them are SSAADD though :/
Well, continue writing! Love, Lana !

Hehe, thank you Lana. It was one of those forced poems though. My teacher was like "make a poem" and im like "fine" so i did ^_^. We should share poems, doesnt matter how old they are. Its always good to look back on your work and see how much you've improved ^_^. And in my eyes not much is retarded when one is writing it. Because while you're writing it, it still means something to you. Even if your teacher is forcing you to write one. Thats just my thought. Its kind of crazy. Anyway thanks, i'll be sure to read your poems ^_^.

<3 Devie <3

Your welcome.. again (: Yea. some on my post ' Some Poems To Share ' are forced by my teachers, some just forced by boredum, but teachers were open to subjects mostly.
I guess you're totally right about the 'retarded' way. I didnt really meant it like that :s .. Its NOT crazy.

Hope you enjoy my poems Devie! Continue writing!
Lana <33

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Lana.

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